Show not Tell

the boy sat cowering in the corner consumed by his own self-pity. he began to feel small and insignificant as if the walls around him began to cave in.

the dog sat patiently at its owner’s feet gently nudging his hand with its wet nose. he looked longingly into his owner’s eyes, they both knew what he wanted yet

I sat on the summit snow surrounding me I gazed longingly at the never-ending mountains just beyond my reach. my thoughts came back to my own body, the frosty chill slowly crept from my fingers up my arms to my core, I shuddered as my lips turned blue and the sun turned crimson and dipped beyond the purple horizon.

Point of view

1st me, myself, I, mine, we, us, my, I’m, our, ourselves

3rd he, she, them, they, we, theirs, themselves

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